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Editorial Audit
A simulated read-through of The Champion Reset, scored against your own chapters, sources and open gaps. Nothing here leaves this browser.
Overall readiness
64
Last run 26 Aug, 07:40 pm
Simulated audit. Scores are illustrative and generated from the demo data.
Category scores
Structure and reader promise
78Does the shape deliver what the vision promises?
Source coverage and claims
61Is every chapter carried by approved material?
Voice consistency
82Does it sound like one person throughout?
Pacing and chapter balance
58Are chapters a workable length for the reader?
Repetition
66Are stories or phrases doing the same job twice?
Gaps and transitions
49Are there holes a reader will notice?
Fact-checking
63Are dates, names and numbers supportable?
Sensitivity and privacy
55Are living people handled fairly and safely?
Front and back matter
40Is the book publishable end to end?
Issues
Chapter 6 rests on one source
Only the coming-home voice note supports the chapter's central scene.
Recommendation: Answer gap 1 and 2 in Gap Analysis, then redraft the middle section.
Framework claim is unsupported
Chapter 11 generalises the four moves with no example beyond the author.
Recommendation: Add two named examples, or soften the claim to a personal practice.
Part Two runs short against Part One
Part One averages 4,100 words a chapter; Part Two averages 1,900.
Recommendation: Expand Chapters 4 and 5, or move one Part One chapter forward.
Wet carpark image used twice
Near-identical phrasing in Chapters 5 and 6.
Recommendation: Keep it in Chapter 6 where it carries more weight.
Family letters not yet cleared
Source s5 is pending family permission and is quoted in two chapters.
Recommendation: Get written permission or paraphrase before submission.
Back matter incomplete
Acknowledgements and About the author are empty.
Recommendation: Draft both before the publisher pack is prepared.
Chapter 3 slips into report language
Three paragraphs use passive constructions unlike the rest of the book.
Recommendation: Read aloud and rewrite in first person past.
Source and factual report preview
Which chapters are carried by approved sources, and which claims still lack evidence.
The boy who kept score
Supported by: Dahya-childhood-interview.docx
Leaving for India
Supported by: India-years-journal-scans.pdf
Learning to lead in a language I did not speak
Supported by: India-years-journal-scans.pdf, Reset Room podcast, episode 41.txt
The month it stopped working
Supported by: Reset Room podcast, episode 41.txt
Two bags and four hundred dollars
Supported by: Coming-home-voice-note.m4a
Finding home again
Supported by: Coming-home-voice-note.m4a
The first paid hour
Supported by: First-clients-notebook-photos.pdf
Belief is a practice, not a feeling
Supported by: First-clients-notebook-photos.pdf, The Champion Reset framework notes
The people who stayed
No approved sources linked to this chapter.
Coaching the room I used to sit in
No approved sources linked to this chapter.
The Champion Reset method
Supported by: The Champion Reset framework notes
What I would tell the version of me at the airport
No approved sources linked to this chapter.
Claims without evidence
- Chapter 11 says the four moves 'work for anyone starting again'. Which two people, other than you, can you show it working for?